I'm going to write my best friends. most important friends for me is Mio and Yumi.
They are special for me and nothing to compare with them.
we are friends since we was 14 years old.
we joined same study abroad program to Germany when we were 14.
We met there but at that time we just normal friends like class mate.
During staying Germany we were still normal friends. However, after came from there, we became best best besttt friends.
After study abroad, we hang out some times and I don't know when but gradually we became best friends.
when I was 15-19, me and mio organized one group to support students to go to study abroad.
we were best partner.
Mio,Yumi, and me are best and our parents knew that.
they are my best friends, rival, and supporter.
When someone in not good situation like broke with boyfriend the others support and we talk all night.
when someone's birthday is near, we make plan to surprise party.
Mio's 16 birthday we took her to Disneyland with eye mask and earphones.
Yumi's birthday we made album using more than 400 pictures and it took to make almost 1 week.
my birthday they took restaurant and gave me wine which made at my birthday!
when we want to leave alone, we just watch over that.
when someone need advices we will give them.
we never fight.
I never feel they are annoying or I do not need them.
we did a lot of crazy things together.
we walked 8 hours without no stop.
we danced all night.
we went to karaoke and sing.
we ate many kind of food and we cooked together!
crying together and laughing together!!
Now, I am in the US and I could not see them and hang out with them.
I Just missed them sooo much.
want to hang out....
want to sleep together.
want to talk about ...
but I promise them before I left japan "i will never give up from anything" .
I could become strong because of them.
I know whenever they are on my side.
Love them so much!!(360 words)
You say, "I'm going to write my best friends". You should say "I'm going to write about my best friends"
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You say,"most important friends for me is Mio and Yumi". You should say, " They are most important friends for me. Their name is Mio and Yumi. "
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You say, " we are friends since we was 14 years old".You should say, "We are friends since we were 14 years old".
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You say, "They are special for me and anyone cannot be more important for me". You should say, "Anyone cannot replace this position"
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You say, " we joined same study abroad program to Germany when we were 14".
ReplyDeleteYou should say, "we joined same study abroad program to go Germany".
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You say, "We met there but at that time we just normal friends like class mate".
ReplyDeleteYou should say, "At that time, our relationship was just member of this program and not best friends like now".
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You say, "However, after came from there, we became best best besttt friends.
ReplyDeleteAfter study abroad, we hang out some times and I don't know when but gradually we became best friends. ".
You should say, "However, after came back from Germany, we hang out some times and we gradually became best friends".
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You say, "when I was 15-19, me and mio organized one group to support students to go to study abroad."
ReplyDeleteYou should say, "During I was 15-19, I and Mio organized group to support students who are going to go study abroad to Germany."
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You say, "Mio,Yumi, and me are best and our parents knew that.
ReplyDeleteYou should say," Our parents know our relationship and they trust us."
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You say, " they are my best friends, rival, and supporter."
ReplyDeleteYou should say " They are not only my best friends but also they are my rivals."
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You say, " When someone in not good situation like broke with boyfriend the others support and we talk all night."
ReplyDeleteYou should say, "When someone of three feel not good like they break with boyfriend, the others support hard."
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You say,
ReplyDeletewhen someone's birthday is near, we make plan to surprise party.
Mio's 16 birthday we took her to Disneyland with eye mask and earphones.
Yumi's birthday we made album using more than 400 pictures and it took to make almost 1 week.
my birthday they took restaurant and gave me wine which made at my birthday!"
You should say, "We held birthday surprise party every year. For instance, Mio's 16 years old birthday, we took her to the Tokyo Disney Land and Yumi's birthday, we made album which use over 400 pictures. Also my birthday, they held birthday party and they gave me red wine which made in my birthday and birth year."
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You say, "when someone need advices we will give them."
ReplyDeleteYou should say, " When we need advices, we give many advices."
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You say, "we walked 8 hours without no stop."
ReplyDeleteYou should say, " We walked 8 hours to have just fun! (our parents said we were crazy)"
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You say,"I Just missed them sooo much."
ReplyDeleteYou should say," I miss them so much（ ; ; )"
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You say,"but I promise them before I left japan "i will never give up from anything" ."
ReplyDeleteYou should say, " But I promised them before I had left japan to try my best and never give up."
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You say,"I know whenever they are on my side."
ReplyDeleteYou should say, " I know wherever I am, they will stay on my side."
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